The picture of the old man pushing a cart is too much like a janitor, and the green color scheme has got to go,
@radioDon. Maybe you should start from scratch, and reimagine the whole book?
Once again. Thanks for your feedback. I really appreciate it.
What should the old man look like if he is an impoverished sidewalk cleaner in a dilapidated part of Metro Nashville, TN after an economic collapse?
He is the father of the woman (which I guess is obvious).
She is the GM of the TV station the news reporter works for.
She (the GM) treats the reporter with contempt most of the time even though her reporting put them on the map.
Despite her mistreatment the reporter is trying to get the woman reconciled with her father before she (the woman) dies of AIDS at years end.
First the reporter discovers the father's identity and then that he is "the lone flickering candle of hope" the president wants dead.
The reporter was already under a year's end death sentence if she did not start reporting the president's murderous campaign to his satisfaction.
Now that she knows the old man is the one the president wants dead she is under a second death sentence. One that will be carried out immediately if the president learns she is holding out on him.
There's a lot more to it than that of course but maybe you get the picture.
Which part should I reimagine from scratch?
Besides starting over, do you have any more positive input for what I have here? Your previous suggestions have been extremely helpful.
Again, I am just trying to understand. Thanks again for your feedback.
P.S. The white trash bag holds the body of a small stray dog who befriended him and would walk with him during part of his route.
The picture represents this line of narrative:
Overwhelming grief and a compelling sense of his own failure almost doubled him over like a fist to his gut. First, he failed his only daughter. He did not know how. This time, when his best and only friend needed him most, he failed him too. His conclusion was as irrational concerning his daughter as it was
his dog. He would realize that soon enough, but right now, it devastated him.
