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Game: Tell Challenge

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Tell: Man with Down syndrome

 

 

Show: "Special", they called him, but beneath the unpopular facade they had no idea just how special he really was.

 

 

Tell: The alligator attacked.

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Re: "special"... I like that. It was a bit of a set-up. My WIP has a main character who has Down Syndrome (patterned after our son) and I wanted to see how others might describe him physically.

 

 

Show: Powerful jaws gaped wide as the water churned beneath the beast's thrashing tail.

 

 

Tell: My car got stuck in a snowbank.

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Sweet! We have a canadian joining the game now! :)

 

 

Show: The dull whirr of my tires in the snow irritated me. "Augh! I CAN'T be stuck, not now! I'm late for my interview!" The fog of my breath mocked me.

 

 

Tell: He was scared.

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tell: Karen was surprised she saw the knife blade coming at her and very quickly she saw the front post rear post sights of the M-9 align hearing two explosions she saw her assailaint a VC agent drop like a sack of potatoes at her ffet

 

 

Show:Captain Guiterrez saw the VC agent with knife blade as fast the chopper pilot lifted the pistol fired twice he witnessed the chest explode.....and the agent drop like a rock

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Tell: he was scared.

 

 

show: his wide eyes were fixated on the kife pressed lightly against his neck, and his body shook as the pressure increased ever so slighty.

 

 

tell: he hates honey mustard.

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Tell: he was scared.

 

 

show: his wide eyes were fixated on the kife pressed lightly against his neck, and his body shook as the pressure increased ever so slighty.

 

 

tell: he hates honey mustard.

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Tell: He hates honey mustard.

 

 

Show: His stomach churned at the thought of ingesting that spicy sweet goo so many enjoyed - honey mustard - bleah!

 

 

Tell: He felt sorry for her.

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Show: The tears making trails down her dirt streaked face watered the flower of compassion growing in his heart.

 

 

Tell: The door closed behind her.

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Well done, VisionWriter!

 

 

Tell: The door closed behind her.

 

 

Show: HInges groaned under the weight of the solid oak door as it ominously dropped into place, nearly catching her heels.

 

 

Tell: They sang a duet.

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Show: Their voices blended together in perfect harmony like two love birds upon a budding branch.

 

 

Tell: It knocked the breath out of him.

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Oh, I love this challenge! I see some great examples for those who confuse both “show” and “tell” (I know I do) :blink:

 

 

Show: Covered in mud, he repeatedly thrust the blade into the wolf's belly until its yelping mouth silenced.

 

 

Tell: He killed the wolf with a knife.

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Show: He could barely make out the state capital building and one of the early high rises the lake shore did look familiar

 

 

Tell: He went to sleep July 23 1973 beside town lake and he awoke July 23 2012 by Lady Bird Johnson lake.

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Oh' date=' I love this challenge! I see some great examples for those who confuse both “show” and “tell” (I know I do)[/color'] :blink:

Show: Covered in mud, he repeatedly thrust the blade into the wolf's belly until its yelping mouth silenced.

 

Tell: He killed the wolf with a knife.

 

 

Welcome, Victoria!

Part of this game is writing a "show" for the "tell" which the previous poster left as a challenge. In other words, if you leave a tell of :"He killed the wolf with a knife", the next poster would write the "show" for that "tell" then leave a "tell" to challenge the next poster. Make sense? Don't know if I explained that very well. If you look back thru the game, I think you'll see what I mean. So, by way of example, I'll take your "tell" and write my own "show" for it, then leave a "tell" for the next poster. ^_^

 

Tell: He killed the wolf with a knife.

 

Show: Guided by his skilled thrust, the sleek blade pushed its way into the wolf's thick hide.

 

Tell: The baby laughed.

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Whoops, sorry about that... don’t know what I was thinking. :blink: I will try again.

 

 

Tell: The baby laughed.

 

 

Show: The infant kicked and squirmed with a wide grin as he reached for his teddy bear.

 

 

Tell: The boat crossed the sea.

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Now you've got it! :D

 

 

Tell: The boat crossed the sea.

 

 

Show: Currents of wind and wave propelled the barge forward till land was but a distant memory.

 

 

Tell: He was uncertain.

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Tell: She felt ashamed.

 

 

Show: She hung her head as his accusing stare drilled into her back.

 

 

Tell: He walked down the street.

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- newbie trying this. (I was to slow let me try again)

 

 

Tell: He walked down the street.

 

 

Show: The sounds of his footsteps echoing as he walked along the the closed stores.

 

 

Tell: She began to relax.

 

 

- Hope I am understanding the game.

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Tell: She began to relax.

 

 

Show: Jan flopped into the large Barco-lounger, rested her head againsts its soft cushion and let out a long slow breath.

 

 

Tell: It taste bitter.

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@nastanford - looks to me like you've got it. Welcome to the game!

 

 

Tell: It tasted bitter.

 

 

Show: The essence bit my tongue, sending chills of revulsion down my spine. (I dunno. Does that even make sense? I think I need a nap!)

 

 

Tell: He lit a fire.

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The concrete shattered his elbow as his face dragged along the pavement, wondering why he had ever thought he could do this again.

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oops! I was responding to he fell of his bike....as a show...don't know if it worked.

 

 

Tell: I told you not to tell the kid's I have a health issue!

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Show: Gravel and skin melted together as his leg scraped the ground, his arm ground into the dirt, and his face collided with the grass.

 

 

OK?

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Welcome to the game, Lynn & AZ!

 

 

Be sure to read the directions on the very first post and join in the fun!

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Happy Easter, everyone!

 

 

In light of the season, I thought I'd try to get things rolling again with:

 

 

Tell: The angel sat on the stone.

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