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How To Build Tension In A Scene

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You've probably heard that conflict drives story. (Orson Scott Card modifies this to 'suffering drives story,' but you get the point.) Tension is at the heart of both and is a major force of Narrative Drive. Here's how to ratchet up the tension in your writing.



Now that the holidays are over, chances are good that you’ve had to make a return. Whether it was a sweater in the wrong size or a gadget you already owned, returns and exchanges are a regular part of post-holiday stress. If you’ve ever worked in retail, you’ve experienced the extended hours, disgruntled shoppers, and high tensions all around.

Returns can escalate that tension. Sounds like perfect inspiration for fiction. 

The Tension of Retail

In college, I worked full-time in a clothing store. Holidays were busy, requiring longer hours, more inventory turnover, and additional customer service. While the fast pace often made the time pass quickly, the constant demands created a tense environment on many days. Even once the major event passed, there was still the matter of clean up, markdowns, and returns. 

So many returns.

And so many stories about why an item needed to be returned, why there wasn’t a receipt, and why they needed me to make an exception to our policy for them. All while people in the growing line fidgeted, sighed, or became belligerent. 

You’ve probably been witness to a scene like this one, too. I thought it might make a great prompt to practice writing tension.

3 Tools to Maximize Tension

Tension is caused when something is stretched tight, when there are opposing forces pulling in opposite directions. To create tension in our scenes, we can use three elements found in any store return: opposing goals, stakes, and time.

1. Opposing Goals

In a retail return, ideally the opposing goals are minimized by the return policy. The business wants to make money or minimize loss. The customer wants to get an item they want or their money back. Those goals don’t have to be in conflict, but they often are, especially when one party feels strongly about what they are owed.

I once had a woman trying to return a pair of shoes. We didn’t sell shoes. She insisted she’d bought them from us, demanded the manager (I was the manager), and left in a huff shouting that she’d never shop with us again.

Think about a book or film you’ve watched recently and see if you can’t find characters with opposing goals. They are almost always present: the parents who want one life for their daughter while she pursues another, the detective trying to uncover the truth a murderer is trying to hide, or the man who falls in love with his best friend while she pursues someone else. Opposing goals.

2. Stakes

This might go without saying, but if the opposing goals don’t matter to the characters, then the tension is lost. To increase the tension, raise the stakes. 

In my literature classes, students often ask why so much of what we read seems to be about death. An insightful student observed, “Because isn’t that the point? We’re all trying to avoid death.”

He was right, but stakes don’t have to be life or death. The stakes need to be something the character deeply cares about. The challenge is helping the reader understand why those stakes are so important. 

If my attempted shoe return had been a scene in a story, I would need to establish why receiving a cash refund for those shoes was worth a public spectacle to this woman. Why this store? Why these shoes? 

If she’s trying to win a bet, those are different stakes than if she’s trying to feed a family. Decide which stakes are right for your story and character.

3. Time

Finally, the manipulation of time can increase tension. Sometimes tension is caused by having a deadline, like a bomb counting down, the characters racing against the clock. Keeping two potential lovers at odds over time creates tension.

Or you can make people wait for someone else, as in our retail example, where the protracted time is inefficient and irritating. 

Consider the role time will play in escalating the tension in your story, and use it to build suspense or conflict.

The Tension of a Good Story

Many of my retail experiences were, in fact, pretty minor. They felt intense in the moment, and they even make fun anecdotes to tell at parties. But the stakes were too low, or the goals were too similar, or the time pressures were too mild for me to write an entire novel based off of one encounter.

Your challenge as a writer is to take these three tools for how to build tension in a scene and use them to create scenes where your characters—and by extension, your readers—must face tension.

Then again, you might be surprised at the variety of ways people experienced these tensions when standing in line for returns. Could you turn a retail experience into a novel?



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My daughter quit a major retail chain after a fellow employee put her in a head lock. He was a not-very-well-supervised special needs employee who thought it would be cool to show what he was learning in a self-defense class. Not cool. The store dithered about what to do and did not take immediate strong action. Also Not cool. That is tension in my book.


Fortunately, in my WIP, the fate of the world is at stake. No problems with tension.



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