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Rasman76

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  1. I don't think there's necessarily anything wrong with using that trope - it's just how you present it. You may want to consider avoiding the word "elemental" when describing these powers and find something similar. Instead of a fire power (where an elf might blast a fireball or lava at someone) maybe call it "cleansing" i.e. like how a fire can clean away germs - a power that is incredibly potent and dangerous if misused - just like fire. Maybe it causes the elf's hands to glow red, and those that feel it, endure a burning sensation etc. Just a thought.
  2. Hey all. At this point I've gotten several beta readers for my book. Thank you so much. I'll be locking this post now but feel free to check out the first three chapters, and if you like them, share them with a friend! Http://www.facebook.com/frompentopage
  3. Hi Calissi, I just sent you a message, I'd be happy to have you take a look at it
  4. Hi Elizabeth! Yes I've read some of your historical posts online - I find them fascinating. My book utilizes old testament names and lore so I always find that subject matter really interesting. I'm not as active on Twitter (though I should be) but I've posted a couple of comments here and there. Your book sounds interesting! Is it on Amazon? Best of luck with remaining teaching year - I used to be a teacher myself, May burnout is real. LOL.
  5. Hi Rachel, The novel is approximately 83,500 words - give or take. I will definitely reach out to you once I've finished this latest revision. You can find out more about it on my author's facebook page in the meantime. It's https://www.facebook.com/frompentopage/
  6. Hi Jared, Thanks! I'm actually doing a revision based on some professional feedback right now but I'll definitely reach out to you once I'm finished.
  7. HI All, I've posted the first three chapters of my YA fantasy novel, The Soothsayer, in the critique forums and now I'd like to open up the rest of the novel for any interested beta readers. I'd be happy to reciprocate on your work, of course. I'm primarily looking for feedback on the plot pacing, dialogue, and descriptions used - or any other parts that may get your attention. The Soothsayer is an epic fantasy, similar in tone to the Narnia series by C. S. Lewis with a bit of "Game of Thrones" thrown in. While not strictly a "Christian Novel', it does have strong Chri
  8. I agree with Zee on this and can only add that sometimes it's even advisable to simply start your story outside the fantasy world and have your protagonist lead your readers into it as they discover the world for themselves - i did this with my own story and I've seen it done really successfully in other authors' work - C.S. Lewis - Narnia did it, so did Stephen King's in "The Talisman."
  9. Dungeons can vary greatly from region to region - and of course the experiences your protagonist goes through in each can be vastly different as well. In the second dungeon you can even have her recall the challenges of her first dungeon delve, and then completely subvert her expectations in this new setting. Have fun with it.
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