NAME: Brianna GENRE: Christian fantasy AGE: MG/YA PROJECTS: I have several projects. A few novellas and a novel-in-progress. Two of the novellas are about people who get trapped in different worlds and/or time periods and have to figure out why they’re there and how to get back. There’s Old West Dream where a girl takes a train ride back in time, A Friendly Kidnapping where two girls are kidnapped for their own good and one is a kind of moral parable on bitterness (which also occurs in another world) called The Bitterroot. My novel-in-progress, while I made up the places, is not fantasy but more historically themed and a more adult story. It’s about a young woman who is very curious and kind, but with a fiery temper who meets the local hermit and subject of gossip. They become friends and together figure out a dark scheme that he is somehow connected to. WHAT I’M LOOKING FOR IN CP: I would like someone who can point out plot holes or blurry areas, tell me what they think of my characters, as well as the basic stuff. I like constructive criticism, not too soft on me, but also encouraging. It would be ideal if it were someone with a basic Christian point of view as well. Although I have written just fantasy too. PS- I read only manuscripts that have little to no foul language or sex references. Also no horror or dark themes. ABOUT ME: Even though I am 29 I am still a child at heart and find it difficult to write on adult themes. My favorite books are Christy by: Catherine Marshall and Beauty by: Robin McKinley. Also Jane Eyre...Pride and Prejudice...Shadow of the Mountain...I like a lot. (Fun facts) My hobbies are crochet and watercolor and diy projects and hanging with my service dog.

Great message! It is easy to read and flows nicely.

Great message! It is easy to read and flows nicely.

I love the honesty and heart of this.

I like this, Bob.

This made me smile. I love the way you turned it into a story blind Bartimeus.

It is encouraging to see the stories of people from cults or simply false doctrines who were freed.

I like the part about the coins and reflection. It gives a good picture.

This short story made me smile. I loved the viewpoint.

This short story made me smile. I loved the viewpoint.

A very compelling beginning. It makes me want to see more!

I love the format and message of your work, however I think some of your commas are unnecessary. With a poetry format you usually don't need a comma at the end of a line.

Good message. Sometimes things are best communicated simply (short and sweet).

This sounds like it has great meaning to you.

An intriguing poem. I enjoyed it, but I think to make it a little easier to follow you might want to put a paragraph between two parts of a sentence. Ex: Lost and among wolves out to get me I am far from where I was Death was out to get me Enemies whom I knew not there was