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Manna started following Looking for Screenplay Advice, Looking for Screenplay BETA READER, Looking for Screenplay Advice and 1 other
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Manna started following Seeking Writers For Carpenters Code and Looking for a critique partner with lighter stories
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Great message! It is easy to read and flows nicely.
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Great message! It is easy to read and flows nicely.
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I love the honesty and heart of this.
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Love Saves Lives (2018 March Of Dimes Theme)
Manna commented on Lighthousebob's story in The Reading Room
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This made me smile. I love the way you turned it into a story blind Bartimeus.
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It is encouraging to see the stories of people from cults or simply false doctrines who were freed.
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I like the part about the coins and reflection. It gives a good picture.
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A very compelling beginning. It makes me want to see more!
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I love the format and message of your work, however I think some of your commas are unnecessary. With a poetry format you usually don't need a comma at the end of a line.
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Good message. Sometimes things are best communicated simply (short and sweet).
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This sounds like it has great meaning to you.
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An intriguing poem. I enjoyed it, but I think to make it a little easier to follow you might want to put a paragraph between two parts of a sentence. Ex: Lost and among wolves out to get me I am far from where I was Death was out to get me Enemies whom I knew not there was