Manna

Great message! It is easy to read and flows nicely.

Great message! It is easy to read and flows nicely.

I love the honesty and heart of this.

I like this, Bob.

This made me smile. I love the way you turned it into a story blind Bartimeus.

It is encouraging to see the stories of people from cults or simply false doctrines who were freed.

I like the part about the coins and reflection. It gives a good picture.

A very compelling beginning. It makes me want to see more!

I love the format and message of your work, however I think some of your commas are unnecessary. With a poetry format you usually don't need a comma at the end of a line.

Good message. Sometimes things are best communicated simply (short and sweet).

This sounds like it has great meaning to you.

An intriguing poem. I enjoyed it, but I think to make it a little easier to follow you might want to put a paragraph between two parts of a sentence. Ex: Lost and among wolves out to get me I am far from where I was Death was out to get me Enemies whom I knew not there was