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dadcard2

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  1. Thanks for responding
  2. As a flat, narrow, gently curved seam, I wend my way between sea and land, I keep the two apart, it seems to me, as I try to mediate their dispute. On the one side the so called cottages: huge homes with expansive lawns. On the other, the sea drubbed rocks. The wind blown sands continually cross me to meddle with the properties. The homes drop rocks to staunch the sea's flow. I provide a middling path for those who cannot afford the homes or the wave spearing boats; who can only walk the fine line between luxury and Davy Jones' Locker. Grandparents bring their grandchildren to an appreciation of the ocean's elegance and the homes' beauty, the sea's violence and the houses' interior rot. I keep my vigil though my efforts to reconcile the two are, it seems to me, futile.
  3. I am not familiar with the word destend; do you mean destined?
  4. It’s Sunday, But Monday’s Coming (c) Prompted by a sermon commented on by Tony Compollo It’s Sunday. The shadows have passed. The sun rose. So what will you do on Monday? It’s Sunday. The burial task’s no longer needed. So what will you do on Monday? It’s Sunday. Women, full of the empty tomb, brought the men. So what will you do on Monday? It’s Sunday; a Spring season ends winter’s mask. So what will you do on Monday? It’s Sunday; His fearful friends now bask in the light. So what will you do on Monday? Now, each day, He comes to heart hearers who hear “So what will you do on Monday?” (c)
  5. I am not well versed (pun intended) in poetry. There are so many forms. Here is a website for 100: https://www.writersdigest.com/whats-new/list-of-50-poetic-forms-for-poets
  6. Either way or both; I do like to see how people respond.
  7. I would like to enter a poem that is mine and is published and copyrighted. Is it ok to put that information in or would that be a "plug" for the book that is not allowed?
  8. End rhyming is difficult for each line - nicely done
  9. Do you want When capitalized? I like the idea of seeing as volitional.
  10. I like the repetition of He is carrying me. In one or two spots the I am contraction did not have the ' and read Im not I'm.
  11. I am not clear on the connection between Job's suffering and the line which follows. Nice job on the end rhymes.
  12. Here is a site the addresses the subject. http://sciencenordic.com/bob-dylan’s-poetry-has-its-roots-bible
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    Soulitude

    I enjoy the play on words of soulitude.
  14. This is well done, especially the descriptions. I noted that the word pictures you drew combined the senses that reinforced each other even before you mentioned it. It is a page turner.
  15. I liked this devotional and had not thought of that separation leading to a second chance. A minor matter perhaps, but do you need both 'although' and 'but" in However, although no Barnabas gospel can be found in the Bible but Barnabas groomed John Mark who wrote the Mark gospel and became beneficial to Paul while he was in prison. Perhaps drop the word 'but'
  16. A well made point. Does tied in my hands were tied need to be in " "?
  17. Nice thoughts. I stanza 2 you might have meant "my" , not "may" When I couldn’t see may way
  18. dadcard2

    Poem

    I have posted a new poem on the Writing Critique Forum
  19. dadcard2

    Poem

    Just added a new poem in the poem section.
  20. dadcard2

    The Chameleon

    The Chameleon There it was, disguised to blend with the dirt; I could barely see the creature as it avoided being hurt. Farther down the path’s one, but it stood out. It was white against the mud and seemed thereby to shout. “Look here, where I stand; I’ll not flinch or move so all mankind can know the Word that God approves. Richard Cardner 6/17/17
  21. It’s Sunday, But Monday’s Coming Prompted by a sermon commented on by Tony Compollo It’s Sunday. The shadows have passed. The sun rose. So what will you do on Monday? It’s Sunday. The burial task’s no longer needed. So what will you do on Monday? It’s Sunday. Women, full of the empty tomb, brought the men. So what will you do on Monday? It’s Sunday; a Spring season ends winter’s mask. So what will you do on Monday? It’s Sunday; His fearful friends now bask in the light. So what will you do on Monday? Now, each day, He comes to heart hearers who hear “So what will you do on Monday?”
  22. Rhoda The idea for this poem is from Acts 12 That night I was seized by toughs in Herod’s bloody game. Sixteen soldiers were assigned to guard my weakened frame. I slept between two guards that night in chains of iron bound when then the light shone in my cell my ribs they roughly found. “Quick, get up!” the angel said. My wrists now were free. “Dress and cloak yourself.” he said “and quickly follow me.” I went with him out of that place past guards and guards again till at last the Antonia gate opened on its own. In the length of one short street I found myself alone. I had no doubt an angel of God freed me from a tomb. I went to Mary’s house straight way where they prayed I’d be freed. My knocks at the outer gate only a slave girl did heed. Rhoda recognized my voice and ran to tell the crew “Peter’s at the outer door God has been with you!” “You’re out of your mind,” they said but she knew what she knew. They prattled, “Not Peter; but a vision’s fooling you.” “We’re busy praying deeply, deeply to deliver Peter now. Go back to your duties, slave, and bother us no more” But I kept knocking, knuckles red; at last they opened up the door. Their doubts had stopped their ears to answered prayer, Rhoda and more. © 2016 Poems 1 Richard A. Cardner
  23. ABOUT I have written over a period of years and will post some of the writings here. You may use them if you agree to 1. make no charge for them, 2. not alter them, 3. cite this site. To reply to them, you need to sign in or be a member. I give thanks to my family, especially my wife Linda, for support. The Poetry Email Workshop of the Poetry Society of New Hampshire as well as other groups in NH and Arizona, have been of immense help; members put up with my puns while commenting on many of the writings. In line with this, some of the writings may refer to the “prompt” which refers to topics on which to work. Of course, the writings are my responsibility and for this I am sure both my family and the other groups are grateful. My ideas have changed as I have grown and I assume that ideas and methods used in earlier writings would be changed if I were to address the topics today. I especially hope that I have not offended my Creator or mislead readers. dadcard2
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