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Everything posted by Celebrianne

  1. While I prefer something about the level of gore an 8 year old boy could handle, everything you're saying about purpose, grit, and real evil is why I've never gotten into Christian fiction. I used to read Clancy until his sailor language started getting into my brain! Give me and my boys heroes, not wusses. And everything is always changing, but as long as we follow a God who chose a book to communicate his eternal truth, there will be a market of readers. Literacy and the Bible walk hand in hand. Get my sons engaged in a story and they will have an easier time with the Bible and vice ver
  2. I love the sense of "what if..." that fantasy makes possible. To have things that are inert and non-sentient given voices and wills. And I love when the reality of good and evil is spelled out clearly. I don't have to feel bad about an orc getting killed--they were not redeemable! Beyond that, it's got to pluck a few of the notes MacDonald and Tolkien sent vibrating through the genre. It's not good if I don't feel like there could be an arrow on the edge of the map (all fantasy must have a map) between their worlds and the one I'm reading. And I love the colors, textures, and
  3. Now a freelance editor you hire before sending it to the acquisitions editor? We specialize in seeing the positives along with fixing the negatives. That's what makes us worth our hire!
  4. I love "he fell in love with his wife" stories! They're my favorite romance subgenre. The Scarlet Pimpernel is a classic in this line, and Cupid and Psyche is one of the oldest stories ever. I've also loved the Amelia Peabody Egyptian mysteries because most of them are after they get married. The Princess by Lori Wick is one of the few modern Christian romances I've reread because they aren't *too* good as they struggle to trust and love each other.
  5. @Zee nailed it. I think the name works, clearly being a cross between the Netherlands and Norway, but it pulls in the gritty, dark overtones that @Amosathar pointed out. Countries don't sue because you are making up fictional world about them, or Pixar would be in total trouble... Nowhere do you get to play with word nuance more than proper names. It can be amazing when you find just the right one. Have fun!
  6. I can certainly empathize with your desire to invite others into your experience, @Amosathar, and if you are introducing me to a place I've never been, I'll want to be well oriented to what you are picturing. But as I point out in the article, this is a kind of detailed writing as a rule went out of fashion ages ago. Perhaps your writing could benefit from Coco Chanel's advice to over-accessorizing woman: Describe as you like, but before you send it out into the world take something back out. Uncomfortable as it may be to let your words take on a life apart from you, the magic of the writ
  7. Well, now that you mention it, God didn't have Moses tell Pharaoh how bad it was going to be for him up front either!
  8. Sure thing. It's here: And they will listen to your voice, and you and the elders of Israel shall go to the king of Egypt and say to him, ‘The Lord, the God of the Hebrews, has met with us; and now, please let us go a three days' journey into the wilderness, that we may sacrifice to the Lord our God.’ But I know that the king of Egypt will not let you go unless compelled by a mighty hand. Exodus 3:18-19 ESV And all I meant by "with Pharaoh" was that they weren't sharing with him, not that they would do anything *to* him. Sorry about that!
  9. Adorable! I especially like how you point out how simple God's way of guiding Adam and Jonah was. This leaves so much room for me to be a thinking, mature person as I carry out his plan. In flip side version of communication, I remember the first time I read about how God told Moses to conceal what the Israelites were actually going to do with Pharaoh. God himself told his prophet to not be forthcoming about the real plan. It was mind blowing to realize God doesn't subscribe to the "whole truth" version of talking. He's quite comfortable keeping people in the dark about important things w
  10. Everyone is pointing out important things about setting, and you've nailed it well, Paul. I know it can drive us crazy to read details (even names) that don't enhance the story. If you mention something, I'm going to always assume you took the trouble of writing it for a reason... Which, by the way, comes in to play as I read the Bible. God himself includes odd details that he's required copyists to bother with for millennia. Why? Usually I find out something fascinating when I start digging into a passage with that perspective.
  11. Fabulous! I struggle to use more senses than just the eyes, but only adding in one at a time sounds practical enough to actually do. And it sounds like you are natural at doing verbal setting well. I'd be right there with that cold mist and roar. It's Niagara, right?
  12. I like what you're doing here. And you've hit it that a light touch works better than too much building a setting. The only thing on this particular descriptor along with "regal" and "mighty" is you are flirting so close to the edge of telling not showing I would suggest a specific description that gives the same impression instead. Show me how the white-haired man holds himself ramrod straight with his eyes narrowed at the clerk behind the counter. In the real world we usually can't be sure it's 'pride' rather than some other attitude (like fastidious) until they start to speak. Sh
  13. If you give enough detail for me (the reader) to orient myself, you aren't at all on the poorly side. And, yes, many of us don't care for lots of detail--especially if it goes on and on. I love the girl's quote, it's so true! And for me, I can tone down the unpleasant stuff (like in Lord of the Rings) to a level I can bear while taking my time with the beautiful things.
  14. I'd love to hear how you deal with this 'drawback' of the written form, or, examples of authors who use this well (or poorly): https://www.linkedin.com/pulse/sketch-setting-cheri-fields/
  15. I like the opening, but the rest is cliched. I'd rework after the Chosen One. But you're learning to elevator pitch quickly. Have fun!
  16. I used that to show up how outrageously overpriced they are. And, there is a point at which you do get what you pay for. I've spent a fair amount of money in my own education. I can't remember who taught me this, but you can go free and put in the time and effort to sift through everything slowly for yourself or you can pay someone who's already done that work for you. Also, at the moment I'm in a class I paid for because I want to understand my own strengths and weakness. At some point a person willing to take time with *me* deserves to be compensated for their time and expertise.
  17. "the series is inspired by a single line out of Revelation...the first book in a fantasy series...about prophecy and fate. While some authors use the "Chosen One" thing as a plot device, I'm using it as a major theme...themes of faith, our struggle with faith, Grace, and the nature of evil." Now, this is starting to interest me!
  18. I'd do it for a 10th the price and be thrilled!
  19. Could be tightened a good bit. When every word counts, use only the ones you *must.* So, only 2 verbs in the first sentence, change "creation" to something that tells us this is a space odyssey, no last name, drop "chosen," tighten the whole "this distant world from a creature known only as the Demon King" to maybe 5 words. And then you have room to tell us why your book isn't just a 'chosen hero the 3,406th' story!
  20. I'm managing editor for an ezine with a print section I don't curate. We don't pay (I barely get paid), but if you like science and start with the Bible not atheistic assumptions, I'll work with anybody. You just have to be nice and either write decently or let me rework your ideas so they don't make me weep with boredom. I've never had an author feel like I messed their idea up terribly, mostly they're thrilled for the help presenting themselves well. My first two paid writings were for magazines, one digital (in 2005!) and one in print. They were much easier to get into although
  21. Yes, and I abandoned Twitter because it's horribly full of trolls. But if you don't try, you are rejected by default. Want help with an elevator pitch.
  22. Just ran into this on LinkedIn: https://pitchwars.org/pitmad/ "Unagented writers, on Sept 3, you can pitch on Twitter during #pitmad. They ask for you to have completed your manuscript before pitching, which is the industry norm with fiction. You'll find that this Twitter party is geared mostly for novelists, though there is a hashtag for nonfiction authors. If an agent requests a partial or full manuscript, look the person up online to ensure he or she is reputable. Your due diligence will avoid you getting caught up with bad actors who jump in to create chaos.
  23. I adore learning about and using fonts! If you want to look really good, expect to pay for the use of one or even two for your cover and it will be more than worth it. Most people won't notice the difference, but they will *feel* it. And fonts are genre specific. Find someone who knows your genre and what direction covers are moving toward. Thanks for the warning about Comic Sans, Lynn. My main blog is for kids, so I looked for a Google font (free and web friendly) that had a round 'a' but I did not use Comic Sans. That and Papyrus are favorites to hate on. For me, Brush Script
  24. It's a good list. What's fascinating is all of these have been around for as long as they have. We seem to be past the Wild West era when new platforms were popping up (and fading) like mushrooms. A point that isn't in the article is the reality that each platform attracts different users. I love facebook not only because it doesn't breed trolls as badly but also because moms, grandmas, and scientists actually use it. If I was targeting pastors and young men, I'd have to be on Twitter way more. And I like Michael Hyatt's advice: pick one, get comfortable with it and then try a secon
  25. Sounds just like how Tolkien used magic. I like it. One of the things I remember reading (seems like someone shared it here) is that magic should have a 'cost.' It's one of the marks of the real world occult that people are wanting power or ease without the investment of effort getting it the normal way costs. So, e.g. the bad guy might shunt the cost to someone else (like the baddies in Dark Crystal renewing themselves at the expense of the little guys), or bear it as a scar like Voldemort losing his handsomeness. But the good ones should have to take time to recover or sacrifice so
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